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More and more business meetings are taking place online. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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Nowadays, A growing number of companies are opting to use online platforms
such
 as Zoom for hosting conferences
instead
 of traditional in-person meetings.
This
 approach has both positive and negative effects, which will be elaborated
further
 in the following paragraphs. On a positive note, it enables employees to work remotely.
This
 way, they can maximize their efficiency and productivity by utilizing commuting time.
This
, in turn, can contribute to the growth and success of a company by improving its performance and reputation in the market.
Additionally
,
this
 trend reduces the financial burden on businesses' revenue, freeing up funds that can be used to expand their work boundaries or to provide salary increments to their workers.
For example
, businesses used to lease or own large, expensive buildings for their meeting, but
this
 trend eliminates the need for
such
 expenses.
On the other hand
, attending online meetings requires a stable internet connection, electricity, reliable hardware and secure software, which may face technical difficulties during the conference and,
thus
, can have negative consequences for the company.
For instance
, many years ago, KNT lost a 1 million dollars deal
due to
 a power outage in the area.
However
, technical errors are uncommon these days, but we cannot overlook
this
 drawback.
To conclude
,
although
 switching to the internet for sessions can have some adverse effects, the benefits are far more as it directly increases the businesses’ finances.
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Coherence and Cohesion
You provided a well-structured essay with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. However, ensuring each paragraph clearly adheres to one main idea would enhance readability and coherence.
Task Response
Good use of examples to support your points. To improve, consider diversifying the language used for introducing examples (e.g., 'For instance', 'Such as', 'Namely').
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure a more diverse range of transition words and phrases is used to improve the flow and coherence of the essay. Phrases like 'Moreover,' 'Furthermore,' 'Consequently' could be used more effectively.
Task Response
To improve Task Response, make sure to directly address both advantages and disadvantages equally, and try incorporating a wider range of ideas and examples. Reflecting on broader impacts may enrich the response.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • cost-saving
  • time-saving
  • increased participation
  • flexibility
  • technical difficulties
  • lack of personal connection
  • distractions
  • limited interaction
  • language barriers
  • cultural differences
  • connectivity issues
  • audio/video problems
  • disrupt the flow
  • building rapport
  • non-verbal cues
  • reduced focus
  • spontaneous interaction
  • exchange of ideas
  • collaboration
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