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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are abale to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays some
countries
 are becoming considerably
same
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similar
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with
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to
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 each other.
Reasons
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of
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this
 relate to that most
people
 are more
training
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 from the several popular sites
on
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apply
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online. In my book, if
countries
 are not able to distinguish
from
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themselves from
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another counties
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another county
other counties
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, various drawbacks will start emerging
into
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. Let's begin by looking at
negative
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 side of
this
 view, All
countries
 have their own unusual feature and appearance,
,
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this specifications
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 only can define the
country
 and help to distinguish, if
country
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the country
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 does not have it,
state
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the state
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 will maybe get into a risk that
people
 never know that the
country
exist
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exists
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.
In addition
,
civils
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civilians
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 cannot recognize their
countries
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country's
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valuable
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value
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 and are not able to conserve their
the
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traditional culture for a long time.
For example
, There are lots of
countries
 all over the world which have no difference
with
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from
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 each other., some of them are American
countries
, Because
the
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almost all citizens use Amazon to buy Products
of
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in
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 their daily
life
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lives
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.
Therefore
, American civils have
same
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the same
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 view and decoration taste.
Also
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 constructions of cities are just like initiated each other. Because of
this
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this,
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 some strangers think that several American
countries
 are not separated and all the one
country
. Controversy, most individuals using several sites that sell
high quality
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high-quality
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 goods
is
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a more trustworthy to buy all types of products. In
this
 way
,.
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,
.
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 Immensely
people
 can save a lot of time that
go
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goes
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 to the shopping.
For instance
, In my brother's case, he paid high costs to buy shoes from the online shop and it
also
 required transportation
expense
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expenses
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nevertheless
,
online
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the online
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 shop did not send my brother's shoes and he cannot receive back his money or shoes. In conclusion,
although
 lots of
people
 use internet sites which vend
alike
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like
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outline
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outlines
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 with others can axe time and do not require arrear of
mile
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a mile
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, it has
huge
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a huge
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 risk of
preclude
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precluding
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countries
’
perculiar
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peculiar
.
Furthermore
,
this
 development has overwhelming adverse aspects.
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