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In social situations, some people believe that it is better to be a good listener than a good talker. Do you agree or disagree?

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Communication is a key aspect between
people
, especially so in a social setting. A handful of
people
carry
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 the opinion that it is vital to be a person who listens well as compared to someone who speaks well. In
this
 essay, I will delve into both sides of the coin before presenting the reason why I think that it is crucial to strike a balance and be the best of both worlds.
To begin
, a good listener is someone who takes in the information attentively
while
 the other party is talking. They
also
 give the speaker the opportunity to talk without any
interuption
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interruption
interruptions
.
This
 not only allows the person presenting the information to speak with no pressure but
also
make
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 them feel heard. Adding on, a person who listens well always provides a response relative to what they have heard which goes to show they are indeed listening and not just nodding their heads in agreement, making them a great company to be with A great example would be allowing a friend who has had a bad day to express his grievances without any judgement.
Next,
on the other side of the coin, there are the good talkers. They are able to converse fluently with any given topic with anyone who's willing to lend them
a
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 ear. These
people
 are usually, if not, always, the catalyst of the social event and the
people
 pleaser. A good talker is essential for breaking the ice at any event and is the one with the most connections.
For instance
, my close friend, Justin is someone
whom
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 is very well connected
due to
 the fact that he is always the one who
initiated
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 conversations.
This
 has opened doors for him to go from job to job with ease
due to
 his wide social circle. In conclusion, I agree to a certain extent that being a great listening ear is vital but I felt that being a great speaker is
also
 crucial in a social convention as well,
due to
 the limitless possibility of expanding horizons.
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Continue to balance the discussion of different views effectively as you have showcased in this essay. Your ability to assess both sides before drawing a conclusion is a strength.
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Maintain the use of examples to support your points. Your reference to a personal example of a friend adds significant impact to your arguments.
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Effectively balanced discussion of both perspectives.
coherence and cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion.
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Effective use of personal examples.
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Logical and easily navigable structure.
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