Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be shut down. Others, however believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion
Although
some people believe that zoos
play an important role in protecting wild animals
, others feel that keeping animals
locked up in such
places can be cruel and unnecessary. Personally, I agree with the idea that animals
should not be kept in zoos
and that zoos
should be shut down.
On the other hand
, some believe that zoos
are useful in some regard. First,
zoos
can preserve endangered animals
by keeping them safe from their predators or any other threat such
as natural disasters or urbanisation. Some zoos
also
run breeding programs in order to increase the numbers of some endangered species to help them avoid extinction. Second,
by keeping wild animals
in zoos
, people can understand more about them and this
can raise awareness amongst the public in order to preserve certain species.
However
, while
the aforementioned idea may be true to a certain extent, I believe that zoos
are unnecessary for the following reasons. To begin
with, zoos
are not the ideal places for wild animals
to live. Some zoos
only provide small cages to be inhabited by two to three animals
, and not similar to their true habitat. Furthermore
, in some cases, animals
can be mistreated as they are often provided with insufficient food and medical care, which has so far caused many animals
in zoos
to die because of starvation or diseases. For instance
, the death cases of 3 Javanese tigers in a zoo in Medan last
year were caused by the management officer not giving proper food and medicines to those tigers.
In conclusion, though some zoos
may have some positive impacts for conservations the certain animal species, overall
, I think they are cruel places and do more harm than good to animal survival.Submitted by erista.pfm on
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