You bought a TV a week ago but when you got home you discovered it did not work properly. You called customer service to report the problem but you have not yet received any help. Write a letter to the company and in your letter: *introduce yourself *explain the problem *and state what action you would like from the company:

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing regarding my previous
week
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purchase from your store.
This
is Zari Shamsa.
Last
week I bought a 52-inch TV Model Nonzero from
Sony
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a Sony
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company.
Although
I received
a
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very pleasant customer service and the store associate
offer
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a lot of information to help us choose a model which really
meet
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our needs,
but
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after I
instlled
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installed
and set up the device it
does
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not work well. After turning on the television,
in
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around 2 minutes it suddenly turned off.
First,
I supposed it was by accident.
However
, it repeated
ever
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time I powered on TV.
Due to
occurring
this
event in
late
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hours of the night, I postponed contacting
with
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your customer service
to
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until
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the next morning.
However
, I have not received any acceptable service yet. Considering the reputation of your store, it is expected to solve the reported issue as soon as possible.
Additionally
, taking the type of
garuantee
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guarantee
I
into
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account, I prefer to exchange
with
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another device
instead
of any repair. Thank you for your attention to
this
important matter. Best Regards, Zari Shamsa
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Try to use more varied and complex sentence structures to improve the sophistication of your writing.
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Make sure to proofread for small typos or errors in spelling to maintain the professionalism of your letter.
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Consider elaborating more on the solution you desire, such as specifying a timeframe for the exchange or a preferred model, to make your request clearer.
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You have done an excellent job introducing the problem and stating what action you would like from the company.
coherence cohesion
Your paragraphs are well-organized around single ideas, which helps the reader understand your points clearly.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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  • firstly
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  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
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  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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