You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English-speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter - Introduce yourself: Roop - explain what is wrong with the furniture ; Washer is not working and one of the sofa in bad condition .Springs from sofa is out - say what action you would like the landlord to take : upgarde the washing sink and fix dinning table

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Dear Sir, I am writing

this

letter to inform

that

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you that

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I am not satisfied with your

apartment

furniture because most of

things

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the things

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are in bad condition. My name is Roopkamal

kaur

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Kaur

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, and I have been living in your

one bedroom

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one-bedroom

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apartment

from

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for

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last

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the last

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two months .I moved from California to the United

kingdom

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Kingdom

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to complete

three

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years

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master's degree in law. Your

apartment

is close to the University

inluded

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included

all amenities available in it .

However

, there are some unexpected things

has

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that have

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been going on

such

washing

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the washing

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sink

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apply

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leaking ,and

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the dinning

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dinning

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dining

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table

has crack

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cracking

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in the middle .

Moreover

closet

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the closet

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is not

wide

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as wide

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as shown in the picture and

bed

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the bed

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make

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makes

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noise

during

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night .

This additional problems

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giving

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give

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me stress and

consuming

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consume

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my half time of the day. I would like to give a notice in one month advance to leave

this

place because there are

lot

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a lot

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of things in the

apartment

that need your attention immediately. I would be glad if you could

rennovate

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renovate

your

apartment

before renting in the future . I look forward to your reply, Yours faithfully, Roopkamal kaur.

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Coherence and Cohesion

To improve the coherence, ensure that each paragraph has a clear central point that is well developed. Additionally, clearer transitions between your paragraphs could help the reader follow your argument more easily.

Task Achievement

While your response addresses the task requirements, providing more specific details about the problems with the furniture would strengthen your letter. Mentioning how these issues affect your daily life could add to the persuasiveness of your request.

Introduction and Closing

Your letter has a clear introduction and an appropriate closing, which is good for the overall structure.

Writing Tone

You maintain a polite and formal tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for writing to a landlord.

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5Linking words
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1Word repetition
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26Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

189 words

5.50

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

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