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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. • describe what you enjoyed about the course • say how much cooking you’ve done since the course • suggest another cookery course you’d like the school to offer

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to give you a review regarding my experience at the
Japanese
 cuisine course
last
 summer. My favourite part
while
 taking the Advanced Sushi course was concerning the teacher's methodology. More specifically, the way she prepared the content based on real
Japanese
 culture, including the history behind popular ingredients
such
 as rice, and how it changed Japan's culinary habits over the centuries. As for my personal practice, my teacher would be pleased to know that I have been practising new sushi recipes every day since I graduated.
Additionally
, I often do dinner parties for my friends on weekends and they seem to have been enjoying my new cooking skills. Another course that I would love to see at the school in the future would be about
Japanese
 confectionary.
For instance
, which desserts and candies have changed over time, and which ones have not. I think it would be an interesting subject to complement my knowledge about
Japanese
 cuisine. I hope
this
 information can be useful to you. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully, Amanda Lago
Submitted by amandacflago23 on

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General
To further enhance your letters, consider adding more variety in sentence structures and use a wider range of vocabulary to express your points with even greater precision.
Coherence and Cohesion
Excellent use of paragraphing, with each paragraph clearly discussing a specific aspect of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clear and logical progression of ideas throughout the letter.
Task Achievement
The tone of the letter is respectful and appropriate for a letter to a course director, indicating a good understanding of the task.
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