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The graph below shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the bar chart provides the proportion of academic
staff
members
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 different genders across the departments of a major college in 2012.
Overall
, the vast majority of the faculties of the university had more male
staff
members
, whilst departments of art, education and medicine had more female ones.
According to
 the information shown in the bar chart, there was a significant gap between female and male
personals
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 in the faculty of engineering which the gap was 69%
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18%
of
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female
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females
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ones
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and 85%
of
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 male
ones
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.
By contrast
, there were 72% of the
staff
members
 in the
department
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 of
education
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 were female and only 25% of them were men. There was a relatively balanced distribution of
staff
members
 in the faculty of medicine which was 50% in women and 49% in men. What should be
partcularly
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particularly
 mentioned is that the gender proportions of the
department
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 of
business
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 and
science
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 were almost the same
while
 that of business had 35%
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female and 62%
in
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male and 38% of
staff
members
 were female and 62% of them were male.
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