The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries. USA,France, malaysia, Brazil and Egypt

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arrival

from 1995 to 2010. To overview,

USA

tourists

place in the highest

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Brazil and Egypt show the lowest

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tourists

then

others. In the beginning, from 1995 to 2000, Malaysia, Brazil,

USA

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tourists

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tourist

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arival

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arrival

increased sightly where

tourists

in France

rise

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up gradually and that was nearly 25 million. From 2000 to 2005 France’s

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some

fractuated

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fractionated

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trend and

USA

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the USA

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shows slightly decreased which was about 82 million.

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, from 2005 to 2010,

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followed

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upward trend

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USA

tourists

had

sightly

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slow

down

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which came

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80 million.

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International tourist arrivals
Trends
Highlighting
Analysing
Potential factors
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Global economic conditions
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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries. USA,France, malaysia, Brazil and Egypt

101.In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Many people try to balance work and other parts of their life. However, this is very difficult to do. What are the problems associated with this? What is the best way to achieve better balance?

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