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You have been living in a rental apartment for the past year. Recently a new neighbor moved in and has been making a lot of noise, which disturbs you. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter: explain the situation describe why it bothers you suggest a solution

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Dear Mr Smith, I am Amna,
resident
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a resident
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 of your suburb since
last
 year. I am writing to inform you about the disturbance, which I have been facing after shifting new neighbours in my vicinity. Actually, I think so my new neighbours have toddlers, and they awake till late
night
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at night
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. They cry a lot during
night time
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nighttime
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due to
 environmental change. You know my profession, being a doctor, I have
tough
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a tough
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 schedule as I have to do day and
night
shifts
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shift
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 duties, which is
very
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a very
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 challenging and tiring job. I scarcely get moments to
do
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apply
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rest and feel
some
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apply
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relax
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relaxed
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 at my home, but
due to
 new neighbours and their
children
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children's
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 noises of playing
in
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at
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night
 time and weeping spells upset me
whole
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the whole
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night
 and day. They
affects
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on
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apply
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my sleep patterns and mental health because of lack
rest
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of rest
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. I would like to suggest
you
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to you
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, they are new in
area
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the area
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 kindly inform them about
surrounding
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the surrounding
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 inhabitants and make their
visintng
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visiting
 park cards so they would be able to go to
park
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the park
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 and their children play in the open space. It will be
great
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a great
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 effort from your side. I look forward to seeing your response as soon as possible. Warm regards, Amna Munir
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coherence cohesion
To further enhance your writing, strive for clarity and coherence by connecting ideas more smoothly between sentences, which can be achieved through the use of linking phrases and transition words.
task achievement
To fully address the task, ensure that each aspect of the prompt is explored in depth. Providing specific examples and elaborating on them can help strengthen your argument and task achievement.
logical structure
Your letter has a clear structure with a good introduction, body, and conclusion, effectively organizing the content.
suitable writing tone
You have successfully used a polite and respectful tone throughout the letter, suitable for communicating with a landlord.
complete response
You clearly explained the situation, the impact it has on you, and provided a suggestion for the solution, demonstrating good task achievement.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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