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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given live graph demonstrates average monthly temperatures,
where as
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whereas
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 the
tablechart
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table chart
 illustrates
total
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the total
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 annual hours of sunshine for
London
, New
York
 and
Sydney
.
Overall
,
total
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a total
the total
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 number of hours of sunshine per year in
london
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London
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 is much less than half of New
York
 and
sydeny
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Sydney
.
Sydney
 has much
hot
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hotter
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temperature
 compared to both the other cities →
To begin
 with, in January,
Sydney
 has the hottest
temperature
 more than 25
°C
,
while
london
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London
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 and New
York
 have less than 10°Cand 5
°C
temperature
 respectively .Afterward of January,
Sydney
's
temperature
begin
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began
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 to drop down till July and
london's
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London's
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 and New
York
's
temperature
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temperatures
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start
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started
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 to rise till August and July.
Further
, in July, New
York
become
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became
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 the hottest town with approximately 30
°C
 compared to
other
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the other
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 two cities. Following these, the
temperature
 of
sydney
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Sydney
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begin
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begins
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 to
rose
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rise
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 after July to 25
°C
 in December.
Lastly
, New
York
's
temperature
 decreases to 5
°C
at
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in
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 the
last
 month of the year
as well as
 there is
also
decrease
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a decrease
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 in the
temperature
 of
London
 from August to almost 10
°C
 in December. Discussing the table chart, the total annual hours of sunshine in New
York
 and
Sydney
 are 2,535 and 2, 473 and in
London
. it is 1,180 which is less than half of other towns.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, york, sydney, temperature, °c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
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