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You are employed full-time and also doing a part-time evening course. You are not able to continue the course. Write a letter to the course lecturer. In the letter • explain why you cannot continue the course • describe the situation • say what you will be doing about it

#course #lecturer #situation
Dear Ms. Jackson, I hope you are well. I am writing an illustration
why
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 I cannot keep on the piano lesson. The main
resson
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reason
lesson
 is that I am employed
a
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in a
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full-time job, and I don’t have enough time for class, and I can’t even complete my homework. First of all,
This
 is
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full-time work
about
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for
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 restaurant waiters, and the workplace is at 156 Liulin
road
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. It’s only 10 minutes bike ride from my home.
Moreover
, as you know, the housing pressure is increasing nowadays, and the price of the house I rented has increased. So I have to change to a higher salary job to pay the rent. Meanwhile, your course is about to start at 8 o’clock, but my work time
end
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 at 10 o’clock. I have tried to communicate working hours with the restaurant manager,
however
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 he said it cannot be changed.
Lastly
, I want to say that I really enjoyed your music class, because it not only taught me about music
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 but
also
 helped me adjust my emotions. Thank you once again! Sincerely, Xiyue Tang
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structure
Try to ensure a clear structure by using paragraphs effectively to separate different ideas or sections of your letter.
flow and coherence
Consider using a range of linking words to help your letter flow better from one idea to the next.
grammar and accuracy
Proofread your letter to correct small grammatical inaccuracies for a more polished result.
task achievement
You’ve successfully communicated the main reasons for not being able to continue the course, which shows a good understanding of the task.
tone
The tone of your letter is polite and respectful, which is suitable for this kind of communication.
greeting and closing
Your letter includes a clear greeting and closing, which is essential in letter writing.

Contractions

Formal and informal language refers to using different forms of language in different settings.

In informal writing, you can use contractions such as I’ll and Сan’t.

In formal writing, you should write I will and Can not.

Do not use exclamation mark in formal writing, but you can use it in informal writing.

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